RJA #11c: Thesis Statement Check

Comments on thesis statements:

http://lgreenmyer.blogspot.com/search/label/ENG%201020-RJ10a

http://eapplegate.blogspot.com/2009/10/rja-10athesis-statement-eng-1020-fa-09.html

RJA #11b: Visual Aids

1) Copy of the Constitution

2) Picture of man wrongfully detained in England.

3) Pictures of countries currently with preventive detention systems

4) Terrorist attack

5) Guantanamo Bay

RJA #11a: Introduction

No matter how much one one wants crime to disappear, it will always be here. From petty things such as stealing a pack of gum after school to large things such as murder, crime will be a part of society as long as people are around. What if we had the ability to stop a murderer before that person was anywhere close to committing that murder? What if we could stop that person from stealing that pack of gum after school while he or she was still in class? That would be pretty great, wouldn't it? Unfortunately, nobody has the ability to read another person's mind. Nobody, except the different governments of the world, evidently. In many countries of the world, there exists a program called Preventive Detention. This is a system in which a person is detained without having committed a crime. In addition, that person does not have the right to any trial or defense in the form of a lawyer. This happens when a person is said to be a threat to the security of the nation. Have you ever heard the phrase, "its not what you know, its what you can prove in a court of law"? According to the Constitution of the United States, everyone has the right to a fair trial. So how can it be allowed that a person can be detained, not allowed defense and a fair trial, having never committed a crime, and worst of all not even be told why they are being held? That is because paranoia over "terrorism" has driven the different governments of the world to drastic, fearful measures such as taking away our civil and human rights. Some might consider that to be the government's very own form of "terrorism". Despite what has been said by creators and supporters of Preventive Detention, it is an unjust way for the government to give people a false sense of national security. They trick people into thinking that since the guy that was recently arrested was a threat and now is off the streets, the country is now that much safer. Sure, it is possible that he was a threat, but it is also possible that you have the wrong guy. Is that man not still "innocent until proven guilty."

RJA #10b: Argument

Argument-

Introducing preventive detention to the United States would be going against constitutional and human rights and is an irreversible evil once passed.

RJA #10a: Thesis Statement

Research Question: Is it fair for one to be detained without being told why and without committing a crime, just because they are considered a potential threat to the national security?



Precise claim: I don't feel that preventive detention is a fair system.

Thesis Statement: Despite what has been said by creators and supporters of Preventive Detention, it is an unjust way for the government to give people a false sense of national security. They trick people into thinking that since the guy that was recently arrested was a threat and now is off the streets, the country is now that much safer. Sure, it is possible that he was a threat, but it is also possible that you have the wrong guy. Is that man not still "innocent until proven guilty."

RJA #9: Evaluation of Sources

Blog- No Author "Preventive Detention At What Cost?" There is no Spoon May 22, 2009 http://www.nospoonblog.com/2009/07/preventive-detention-at-what-cost.html
No author, this may not be as credible because there is no author and it seems to be more opinion based than factual.



Book- Katsh, Ethan M. Taking Sides: Clashing Views on Legal Issues, Vol. 13, University Of Massachusetts, McGraw Hill, 2008
Latest edition of a well-recognized book on political issues.



Periodical- Usher, Rod "Better Late Than Never" Time Magazine, May 28, 2003 http://www.time.com/time/magazine/article/0,9171,901030602-455005,00.html
Rod Usher is a writer for a well known magazine, TIME. This, however, may be a little out of date.


Periodical- Froomkin, Dan "Problems With Preventive Detention" The Washington Post May 22, 2009 http://voices.washingtonpost.com/white-house-watch/looking-backward/the-problems-with-preventive-d.html
Recent article from the Washington post from a journalist.

Website- Greenwald, Glenn "Facts and Myths About Obama's Preventive Detention Proposal" May 22, 2009 http://www.salon.com/opinion/greenwald/2009/05/22/preventive_detention/
Not a very well-Known website and I could not find much about Glenn Greenwald.

Video- PBS Video "After Guantanamo" September 4, 2009 http://www.salon.com/opinion/greenwald/2009/05/22/preventive_detention/
PBS is a credible resource and this aired on T.V. on this same date.

Internet Research Project

Review of INFOMINE

INFOMINE is a Virtual Library of Internet Resources that was created by college librarians to be used by students and professors at the University level. It was created in 1994 at the University of California, Riverside, as a project. It was one of the first web-based academic virtual libraries and is always expanding its resources.

Strengths-
*Contains over 100,000 links
*Provides a great number of access points
*Provides a second-tier collection that complements its first-tier collection which allows the user more detail in searching as well as a greater number of search results.
*Can rank search results by relevance or alphabetically by title.
*Supports Boolean and Exact searching methods

Weaknesses-
*Does not search entire web
* Has small number of topics within the site, but is growing
*Is only for academic purposes
*Can be confusing to first-time users

INFOMINE searches electronic journals, electronic books, bulletin boards, mailing lists, online library card catalogs, articles, and directories of researchers.

Databases:
Ejournals, periodicals, serials, news letters, directories, virtual libraries, reference resources, instructional uses, textbooks, books, etexts, text archives, maps & mapping, digital libraries, eprint/preprint archives.

Default Operation: It will not search OR, AND if two words are entered without Boolean symbols.

Case Sensitivity- There is no case sensitivity for INFOMINE.

Stop Words: the, a, be

Advanced Search Function- Browsing indexes which include searches by subjects, keywords, and other indexes which include authors, titles, resource types and ’What's New.”

Limits- (within advanced search)
*Record Origin
*Resource Access
*Resource Types

Sorting- INFOMINE gives the user the ability to sort results by relevance and alphabetically.

Display- Title of article and brief quotation with the ability to “view more”

Help Function- Brief set of tips to help the user narrow his or her search

Special Features- One can customize this site on their computer and also receive RSS feedback.

RJA #8c: Multimedia

video surf
keywords-CNN (preventive detention)
Search strategy- parentheses
10/10/09
62 hits
4 of 5 relevance

RJA #8b: Social Media

Google blogs
Keywords- Preventive detention benefits
search strategy- search engine math
10/10/09
4,300 hits
4 of 5 relevance

Symbaloo.com
Keywords- blogs preventive detention problems
search strategy- Boolean (AND)
10/10/09
41,200 hits
5 of 5 relevance

RJA #8a: Websites

Search Engine lycos.com
keywords- preventive detention
Search strategy- search engine math
10/10/09
133,546 hits
3 of 5 for results (too many results for books to purchase)

Pandia Metasearch
keywords- preventive detention NEAR United Kingdom
search strategy- Boolean
10/10/09
Unknown number of hits (not recorded on website)
2 of 5 for search results

I searched several directories for preventive detention and related topics. None of which had any results.

CompletePlanet gave me no results for (preventive detention) and when I removed the parentheses I found 1 result which was not relevant.
10/10/09
1 hit
0 of 5

joongel.com (great site)
keywords- preventive detention congress
search strategy- Search engine math
10/10/09
29,400 hits
5 of 5

RJA #7c: Field Research Plan

I plan to conduct a poll of 100 or more people to see how many people are for preventive detention in America, how many are indifferent, and how many how many are against it. I will also interview people involved in law enforcement and politics to get their views on the matter. I will ask questions such as "Do you feel that preventive detention is a good idea in the United States as well as worldwide?" "Is it fair that a human being can be held captive without commiting a crime?" How will this benefit America and how will this effect America negatively if the law is passed?"
I plan on finishing my field reseach no later than October 7th and I will try for as many police officers and politicians as I can. I also plan on asking those same questions to students at Metro as well as family members and the general public.

RJA #7b: Internet Research Tool Test

INFOMINE.com Search- +preventive +detention +controversy
10/2/09
1 hits
5 of 5 for relevance of hit

2nd search- +preventive +detention +Obama +controversy
10/2/09
0 hits
0 of 5 for relevance of hits

RJA #7a: Internet Research Tools

The Internet tools I tend to use most are google, yahoo!, AOL, and ask.com. I prefer google over the rest of these because I find the information easier through google, meaning I don't have to try many different words or phrases before I find what I need. Yahoo is another great search engine because it has many different pages with yahoo.com such as sports, news, weather, etc. It is my favorite for current events but not school research. I don't use AOL very often. It is my homepage so I will occasionally use it to check sports scores or to do a quick search. I very rarely use ask.com because I usually find what I need on Google or Yahoo. However, when I cannot find what I need, I will go to ask.com.